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Title: Alternative Rivals Post by Annie on Oct 27th, 2003, 9:42am At last I have dared to start writing a slightly different (and extremely weird + crazy) version to what hapeens when Joey nearly dies in Rivals. I've hardly thought it out, but I thought that I'd better get started before i forget what is going to happen. It'll probably end really lamely and everyone will just be faking congrats + it'll probably be short too, but here goes. It starts word for word as it is in the book. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Annie on Oct 27th, 2003, 9:58am No-one dared move or speak as the Robin sang on, and, meantime, the harsh sounds were surely softening a little, the crimson flush on the hollow cheeks was a little paler. Struck by a sudden awful thought, Jem moved forward at last and laid his hand quietly on the slim wrist. It was cooler and didn't seem so dry. His finger moved to the pulse. For a moment, he could hardly feel it. Then it was clear that it had stopped altogether. He dropped the wrist abruptly, trying and failing to seem outwardly calm, and looked towards Madge who was still staring at the cool, white face, laid back on the white pillows with a look of hope in her eyes. Suddenly she turned on him, and saw the dread on his face. It was then noticed that Robin had not been attended to, and as Jem turned to carry the gently sobbing child who had soon understood what had happened out of the room, Madge swayed and fell gently into the weak arms of Dick, who was standing behind her. The procession of those who had been in the room, when emerging into the dazzling sunlight, showed all what had happened, and no questions needed to be asked. Madge was quickly transported to another room, where she was slowly revived. Even strong Dr. Jem who had seen so many deaths in his career, was showing signs of emotion. Joey had been dear to him, and despite telling himself that Joey was happy now, out of pain and suffering, and that it would not do for Madge to see him thus, he could not hold back the air of suffering and the hardened look which was about him. Unable to face Madge, who by this time was crying softly, and asking herself why it had to happen, he signaled silently to Jack, to escort Madge, Dick and the Robin back to the Chalet. Dick was repeating what he had said to Jem less than an hour ago- "It hits hard Jem, it hits hard!" Under strict orders not to let Madge return or stay awake any longer, Dr. Maynard, the only stable one there now, did as he was bidden, and quietly removed the two from the building followed by Dick. Madge was still muttering softly and the Robin was trying hard to blink back the tears rushing to her eyes. It was very hard on her who had already lost a mother, to now lose someone who had been a sister these past few years. A parting word from Jem that Jack should hurry, as the sky looked like opening any moment, saw the car speeding back to the Chalet School, lacking a member of the family and school forever. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Rachael P on Oct 27th, 2003, 10:37am Annie, This is a great start and an interesting premise - what would happen if Joey had died? :'( Please keep going - it will be interesting to see how they all cope with it, including the girls' reaction to Maureen whatsherface .... |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Annie on Oct 27th, 2003, 10:47am YEY! Someone's replied ( I know it's far too early to expect anything, but anyway) Thank you for the encouragement ( I only hope that it is profuse) (is that the right word, what does it actually mean??? ::), I actually mean real) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Grembles on Oct 27th, 2003, 10:57am Annie - I think this is great so far please keep going. I am so envious of anyone who can write as I don't have an original idea in my body. Please keep writing especially as I am home from work ill today and need something to keep me amused. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Elisabeth on Oct 27th, 2003, 11:01am Crikey! This is dashed good! (Sorry everyone - I've been reading too many old books) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Marianne on Oct 27th, 2003, 11:06am Annie this is fantastic, there arn't many people in the world who can write seriously! As for the word profuse i beleive it means a lot, (*i'm always appologising profusely) so of course will encourage profusely! :D I'd love to see lots more please! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Esmeralda on Oct 27th, 2003, 11:11am Please keep going Annie - it looks good so far, and it's a really interesting proposition |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Rachael P on Oct 27th, 2003, 11:39am Annie, I think you mean "genuine" and my comments were certainly genuine ... and having read the number of comments since then, I think you can safely bask in your reflected glory that your feedback to date has been "profuse" and all comments have been genuine ;) So come on girl ... keep posting! *v pleased that two Drabbles (this one and KB's) have been set in Tyrol* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Abi on Oct 27th, 2003, 11:45am Quick - get me the tissue box! This is great Annie - please carry on! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Lisa_T on Oct 27th, 2003, 12:39pm Yes, do carry on! This is good! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Chloe on Oct 27th, 2003, 12:41pm This is good you should definatly keep it up! :) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Sarah_L on Oct 27th, 2003, 1:11pm Oooooooooooooh, I like this :) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Annie on Oct 27th, 2003, 1:47pm EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEK everyone's replying and telling me to hurry up. Okay, here's a tiny eency bit, as I'm actually in the middle of something else BTW, to Grembles, if you don't have anything to write about, I suggested somewhere else that someone should write a story about a teacher tilting. You could have a go at that! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by NickiL on Oct 27th, 2003, 2:06pm I love this idea Annie - especially as I always thought Robin saving Joey by singing was way too good to be true! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Annie on Oct 27th, 2003, 2:17pm Back at the Chalet School, towards which the miserable car sped, everyone was praying long and hard for what could not happen now. They had been warned not to strya far from the chalet, as a storm was inevitable very soon. However, certain parties were too engrossed in their meditiations that when the first dancing flakes of snow descended, thy were far away from the chalet, and only just made it into the building as the full force of the storm showed itself. It was at this moment that a car came skidding into the drive, to emit two young men, a young lady and a child. The child ran inside immediately, but Madge stood outside, despite the efforts of the two men, in the now raging blizzard. It was not until a large tree crashed down over the fence, that Madge awoke from her ponderings, and she was quickly hustled upstairs. She had asked to be brought to the school and not her home, so that she herself may be among the girls when the news was broken to them. All of the pupils were now in formrooms and common rooms, apart from Frieda and Simone, who saw Mrs. Russell as she was gently brought to Matron. No words were needed to tell the two girls what had happened, and Jack motioned to them, not to tell a soul. Both girls stood still for three whole minutes, their faces becoming more and more shocked, unhappy, and strained. They had been sure that their prayers would not go unheard, and yet they had. As they entered their common room, where all was silent in anticipation, their air was noticed by the others, and again, no words needed to be said, tod escribe what had happened. The message was carried in just the same way, when Marie met Cornelia in the passage, who passed it on again to her whole form when she returned. They had all seen the car arrive, and were expecting news, so they understood the look of dread in those people's eyes who knew. The silence of the sixth form common room was broken as the Robin burst in and made straight for Frieda and Simone. She was sobbing profusely and despite all the support she received from the occupants of that room, those words being the first uttered in so long it seemed, she would not stop until she eventually fell asleep, and was found in this state, sound asleep, by Miss Wilson, who came up to inquire about the unusual silence. Finding the whole toom in a state of utter dejection, she gasped in surprise. Although she herself had heard the news, she did not expect the girls to. " What on earth!" she ejaculated at length. Frieda then explained how the news had spread so rapidly without herself and Simone disobeying Dr. Maynards orders and Bill soon understood, collected the Robin, and departed still wearing an expression of silent mourning the girls had never seen on her before. Within an hour, the whole school knew. Many of the staff wished to go over to St. Scholastika's to see Dr. Jem and, perhaps, if they dared, the body of the departed. However, the storm outside had increased, if that was possible, and it was sheer suicide to try and walk or drive through the whirling snow, winds and falling trees. Suddenly the telephone rang in the Head's office, she slowly picked up the receiver, and answered in a hard voice. She only heard the sound of a strangely excited, yet emotional voice at the far end, when, with a crackle, the line cut dead- the wires had been cut. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Annie on Oct 27th, 2003, 2:22pm So much for a tiny eency bit. I wish I could go on, but I don't have time. By the way, I thought that I'd just like to point out that it's like halfway or over, so it's not going ot be at all long. Don't get your hopes up for a grand epistle. I'd just like to add a tiny bit more before I depart. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Carolyn P on Oct 27th, 2003, 2:26pm Lovely. The idea of the whole school falling silent as the news spread without a word being spoken is a very strong image. Now, who exactly was on the telephone, and why? |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Annie on Oct 27th, 2003, 2:38pm The door of her study opened to emit Madge, her face drawn and looking much tewnty years older. "Madge!" whispered Madamoiselle. "I am so sorry for you." Madge looked up, but did not reply. He simply showed a feeble effort of a smile. "Then you know then," was her only, faint reply. "Yes, I do know. But I also know that now she will be happy and out of suffering. God called her, you couldn't have prevented it, if he wanted her." Her toned were gentle and soothing, and they managed to calm the young lady. "I...I...could I use the 'phone. I just...I just want to speak to Jem." "I'm sorry Madge," was Madamoiselle's gentle reply. "The line's dead." Mrs. Russell started. " Dead, how do you know?" "Someone just tried to ring me, and it cut out." "Who was it?" Madge asked. "Je ne sais pas!" was the only reply she could receive. "Je ne sais pas." |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Annie on Oct 27th, 2003, 2:41pm on 10/27/03 at 14:26:35, Carolyn P wrote:
Aaah. You'll have to wait and see! ;) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals- please read! Post by Kitten on Oct 27th, 2003, 2:56pm This is cruelty! Please tell us quickly. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Annie on Oct 27th, 2003, 3:21pm I'd really love to, but I also really have to get off this computer. I've been on it long enough. Maybe I'll tell you tomorrow, or maybe I'll think up something to fill in the story with, and it'll be a few days at least, before I get to the ending part of the story. If I don't think up anything else to occur, then the next two bits I write will end it, and I, aswell as other people I'm sure, will be annoyed at how short it was. *Enjoys being tantalising and hopes KB will read this thread so that I can get back on her for all the tantalising she did and still is doing about Peace* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Vikki on Oct 27th, 2003, 3:22pm Annie, this is really good! Please continue! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Marianne on Oct 27th, 2003, 3:50pm Torture! Cruelty! ;D Wow! more please! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Sarah_L on Oct 27th, 2003, 3:58pm on 10/27/03 at 15:21:22, Annie wrote:
Don't make the rest of us suffer because of KB! More, please. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Elisabeth on Oct 27th, 2003, 4:01pm BTW I happen to know who it is on the phone and why. Prepare to be shocked! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Annie on Oct 27th, 2003, 5:46pm lol! Unfortunately you do Elisabeth! I wish I could restrain myself from writing any more until tomorrow so I can tantalise KB, but I can't! I really want to write more. I can't decide whether to write it here, or just put it onto Word and then post it tomorrow, so I can see what KB and Kathryn have to say. Yes, I think I'll do that. However, I'm getting scared because I don't know how well the end is going to go over. I have a feeling that everyone is going to go mad and I will be very sore from bruises caused by objects thrown at me from other CBB members because they are so disappointed in me. Okay, off I go into my own little computer, to write about who was on the telephone and why. I suppose Elisabeth will come back and start tantalising again. I'd just like to add that I don't think the story will be much longer- it's not a proper story, just a little thingumyjig. FAREWELL!!! ;D(I love being cheeky) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Vikki on Oct 27th, 2003, 6:10pm Annie, we would never have guessed that you love being cheeky!! ::) ::) ::) *disappears in a pool of sarcasm* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Lisa_T on Oct 27th, 2003, 7:24pm *wonders whether Annie is going to go one better than EBD and have Robin revive Joey by singing 'Red Sarafan' halfway through the funeral service* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Carolyn P on Oct 27th, 2003, 7:56pm All this teasing, Annie you are a true drabbler. I'm definatly forming the opinion that half the skill in writing drabbles is learning how to tease. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Lesley on Oct 27th, 2003, 8:05pm Love this Annie - more please! (Good cliff!) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Kathryn on Oct 27th, 2003, 9:18pm Keep going! It is getting interesting and I have an inkling as to who is on the phone. But will probably be wrong as I usually am. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Oct 27th, 2003, 10:11pm Well, I'm here so you can post the rest now! *doesn't get upset by cliffhangers anymore* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Esmeralda on Oct 28th, 2003, 12:03am Really hopes that Annie will get around to posting the next bit very soon. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Elisabeth on Oct 28th, 2003, 10:09am Oh Kathryn I'd love to hear your inkling! Don't worry everyone, I'll make her post some more today - she has it all in her head and the next post should prove to be the most astounding. I have to warn you all that Annie has no desire to make CS sane or realistic. btw her slowness to post is due less to skilful teasing than brute laziness. ;) ;) ;) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Oct 28th, 2003, 10:53am Sane? Realistic? Bah! Who needs that in the CS?! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Vikki on Oct 28th, 2003, 12:48pm KB, could you explain those two strange words to me? Sane? Realistic? I'm confused!! ;) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Annie on Oct 28th, 2003, 2:11pm Oooooh I have so much to say besides starting to get on with the story. First- to Vicki- don't be naughty and I'm not surprised that you've never heard of the words sane and realistic Second- to Lisa_T that's a very interesting idea. Third- to Caroline + Lesley, thank you very much Fourth- to Kathryn- I'd be interested as to know who you think is on the phone. You're probably right as it's quite obvious if you have any brain at all and any knowledge about my (non-existent) brain. Fifth- to KB- Hoorah, you read it- I am greatly honoured that you said something about it and did not think it a waste of time to reply. Sixth- Esmerelda- I shall Seventh- BLEAH to Lizzy Eight- I agree with you KB |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Vikki on Oct 28th, 2003, 2:19pm *decides it might be time to do something about Annie's cheekiness!* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Annie on Oct 28th, 2003, 2:25pm Okay, here goes *Prays fervently that it will go over okay* *** Before and while all this was happening at the Chalet School, back at St. Scholastika's, Dr. Russell was desperately trying to compose himself. He had, rather unnecessarily, told Miss. Browne and their Matron that Joey had finally slipped away, and the rest of the girls were soon assembled in the hall to be told and to pray together for the Chalet School girls, staff and Joey's family and friends. It was not long after Jack had left with Madge, the Robin and Dick, that he wished he had kept that young woman with him. She would be needing him soon enough, and the increasing storm outside made the short journey to the chalet utterly impossible. The swirling snow made vision impossible and the wind was bringing down trees and branches everywhere. After a long fifteen minutes spent at the window gazing with unseeing eyes at the storm raging outside, Jem pulled himself away and prepared himself to do what he had wanted to do, but didn't dare. He wanted to go back and see Joey, but did not think he could face it. But, almost without knowing it, he found himself turning the brass knob on the door which led into the room in which that young lady, whose life had been cut off so early, lay. As he looked towards the bed, with despairing and longing eyes, he started, and looked more carefully at where her body was carefully tucked in under the covers. Was it really true, or was it that his bemused mind was playing the fool and he was imagining what he was sishing, and that she could come back to life. He looked again, and all was still, that innocent, young, white face, as cold and hard as it had been before. And he turned to leave once more. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Annie on Oct 28th, 2003, 3:00pm But this time, there was no mistake. Even though the glance was only through the corner of his eye, there was a clear, although very slight, gentle up and down movement over her chest. The cheeks didn't seem quite so white, nor the eyelashes so still and dead. It was such a shock, that Jem swayed for a moment, not believing his eyes, before he managed to compose himself, when he almost fell forward and snatched up the slim wrist lying gently on the white folds around it. The pulse was very slight, but so firm and steady. Once, it flickered and there was a pause between the beats, but it was sure and strong. "What a fool I was," he cursed silently. "What an unspeakable fool!" Then, suddenly, he could stand it no longer, and any witness would have seen Dr. Russell standing over his sister-in-law gently shaking with suppressed tears. All of a sudden, he stopped as his thoughts turned to Madge, suffering so unneccessarily at the Chalet School. Then, just as suddenly, he started laughing uncontrollably as the delightful truth really and truly dawned on him, that his sister-in-law was not dead and they would have so many more splendid times together. A quick examination revealed that she was so much stronger, that there was no doubt about her recovery. Robin must have cured her after all, and when he had not felt the pulse, it was just an irregular and very faint beat which he missed. Continually cursing himself for being so quick and irrational in his judgement, yet unable to stop himself from being so utterly delighted, Jem literally bounded out of the room and made down the stairs at least three at a time- in a way that would have disgraced the whole Russell family had he been seen. He dashed into rooms and studies, but all were empty, until he bounded up the steps into the back of the hall, and found himself standing in the centre of the dais in front of the whole of St. Scholastika's. They all looked up from their private and silent prayers at the dishevelled yet utterly delighted figure, standing there before them. He ran forward to Miss Browne and whispered something into her ear. The effect of this was that she promptly sat down in the nearest chair and began to weep quietly. Then Dr. Jem stood up and addressed the whole school, telling them the mistake that had been made, that Joey was in fact much stronger and rapidly on her way to recovery, and that he was so inexpressibly sorry for the totally unnecessary distress and unhappiness he had caused. This remark was promptly squashed by those in a state fit enough to reply, saying that anyone could have made exactly the same mistake. Others were crying, others faint, and others still open-mouthed and pale, unable to digest the information. Even Elaine condescended to put in her passionate word of encouragement and happiness, and in short order, they were all once more delightfully happy and demanding to see her at once or at least be allowed to dance in delight. It was at this point that one of the staff said the words 'Mrs Russell' at which Dr Russell promptly disappeared again in the direction of the school office to telephone the Chalet as travel was utterly out of the question. Pushing the secretary aside, he made for the telephone and promptly put a call through to the Chalet School. Just as he was planning what to say, someone answered the 'phone at the other end, and he began to speak fast and furious in indescribably excited tones, when, with a crackle, the phone cut dead. Swearing under his breath, to the utter consternation of the secretary, he made for the door, with the vague idea of somehow getting to the Chalet. However, as soon as he opened the door, the snow and wind ripped him off his feet, and sent him skidding across the carefully polished floor wound up in snow and leaves, to end up prostrating most reverently at the feet of the Fawn. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Annie on Oct 28th, 2003, 3:20pm Every few minutes, would see Dr Jem running to the door, to see if an escape to the Chalet School would be possible. He fretted himself constantly as to the state of Madge and the Robin. That he could have been such a fool as to not have checked the pulse again and just judge that the child was dead by a quick touch of the pulse, her temperature and her colour, weighed heavily on his mind all that day. The school was in great rejoicings and Maureen was indescribably happy. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Rachael P on Oct 28th, 2003, 3:28pm Blimey, Annie! I wasn't expecting that! And poor old Madge and Robin! I hope he gets to tell them before they make themsleves ill with grief! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Vikki on Oct 28th, 2003, 4:16pm Annie!! Sneaky twist there, but please let the storm die down so Jem can put Madge and the rest out of their misery!! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by NickiL on Oct 28th, 2003, 5:11pm Hehe! Typical Joey!! I was sort of expecting it but you've done it really well ;D |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Oct 28th, 2003, 8:13pm *sniffs back tears* Of course this was worth responding to - it's a wonderful story! And I do love the twist of Joey surviving. And of course, that wonderful mental image at the end of him on the floor in front of the Fawn... ;D |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Esmeralda on Oct 28th, 2003, 11:36pm Thank you Annie - love the idea of Jem bounding around like an excited young boy, but I do hope he gets to tell the CS soon. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Nicolette on Oct 29th, 2003, 2:24am Liked the twist, with all the complaints around about Joey's miraculous recoveries this was certainly something of a double bluff! Can't wait for more. *wondering how many other patients Dr Jem accidently pronounced dead* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Kathryn on Oct 29th, 2003, 3:21am I thought it was Joey on the phone saying she wasn't dead! Must have missed the bit where it said that Jem was still there. Please don't kill him off on the way back to the CS. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Carolyn P on Oct 29th, 2003, 10:29am Like Kathryn I thought it was Joey on the phone. Wonder if any of Dr Jem's pronounced deaths became actual from being shoved in a mortuary. Wonderful idea though and so good to see the always right Jem getting it wrong, and as for the scene with the Fawn!!! Is there more, will someone die? |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Oct 29th, 2003, 10:51am I have to admit that I was quietly hoping that Joey would appear in front of Jem (out of bed, you know) and scare him into fits! ;D And just who's sitting beside her while Jem's trying to kill himself getting to the school? Or is she left to expire in private this time? |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Annie on Oct 29th, 2003, 10:51am Yey you all like it. Interesting idea of killing him off on the way to the CS, Kathryn! Hee, hee. ;D I also liked writing the bit when Jem was on the floor in front of the Fawn. Hee, hee ;D Can I just say that if you spot any incorrect things that do not make sense, Chalet School wise, please point them out because I want the story to be as accurate as poss. Danke. Okay, back to the story: At the Chalet School, everyone was still silent and shocked at the news, the Robin had been put to bed and was now running a high temperature. Madge was unable to cry, just hardened and white. Lessons had been abandoned, but walking outside was out of the question, the storm continuing in its ferocity. The common rooms were dull and silent, all the pupils being snappy and irritable. After having got over the shock of the news, they were inclined to be annoyed at anything possible to get annoyed at! The staff had a great deal of trouble in controlling the pupils, and keeping them quiet for the sake of the Robin and Mrs. Russell who were now tucked up in bed. Jack was constantly attending to Madge, and had only just succeeded in persuading her to drink a sedative. She had refused surprisingly strongly for her state, and had only consented as she was becoming too mentally strained and exhausted to protest any longer. She could feel the utter dejection in the school, but could not help it in any way. Dick kept trying to run out to St. Scholastika's, but the results of his efforts, were much the same to those with Jem. *** That evening, there were no restrictions on bed times, and yet everyone went early, most of them to cry themselves to sleep and to have a very restless night. Apparently in the night, the storm had abated slightly, but the cold dawn brought with it the intensity of yesterday’s storm. Again, there was no question of outdoor activities. The wind had calmed slightly, but the heavy snow continued, making visibility and travel impossible. The Robin was gradually getting worse, and although fully conscious and alive, was very feverish and Jack feared for her frail life. Having already lost her mother, and only having her father, Joey was as dear to her as a sister, and she had learned to love her. The (alleged) loss was great to her although she still could not believe that those happy times with Jo would never be again. That day was the same as the last, silent and morose, although attempts at lessons were tried in the morning and abandoned. There was some enjoyment in the evenings, and many of the girls went to bed later. Appetites were once more high, although scarce and overall, the staff noticed a positive development in the girls. The Robin, however, was gradually becoming worse and worse. Jack was wishing Jem was there, and Madge, Joey. Although still conscious, that young lady with her black curls laying around her flushed face, seemed hardly there at all. *** At St. Scholastika’s the same discoveries of the storm showing no signs of fading were greeted with words not fit to be uttered, especially the curses from Dr. Jem’s lips. He was almost worrying himself sick with thinking about the Chalet School, Madge and Robin in particular, not to mention Joey’s brother and Dr. Maynard. The discovery of finding that the snow was gradually building up against the east side, which happened to be the front, of the building, disconcerted Dr. Russell when his thoughts turned to his anticipated flight to the Chalet School bearing the joyful, if shocking, news of Joey’s existence. There were no doors or windows to accommodate him on the north, south and west sides of the buildings, which were those free from snow. By next morning, they were totally snowed in and all hopes of going over to the chalet were squashed by Miss. Browne. There was no way out. And yet another day was passed in much the same way- praying for some form of rescue. Jem kept hoping, that as the Chalet had a fence around it, they would not be snowed in, and in this he was right. However, they were having another problem. *** The storm having passed now, Dr. Maynard tried immediately to get out of the chalet. This was easily done, but the next challenge was to escape from the enclosure of the fence. This was easier said than done, as snow was piled up to the top of the fence preventing any escape. The whole of this day was spent in clearing a way out. Both Jack and Dick wanted to fly to St. Scholastika’s as soon as humanly possible, but Jack had insisted on Dick staying behind to care for the Robin and Madge until Jem came. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Annie on Oct 29th, 2003, 10:55am Interesting idea KB! In answer to your question, Jem keeps dashing back to see Joey who is recovering rapidly, but mostly the Saint's matron is seeing to her. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Oct 29th, 2003, 10:59am Thanks! *smiles rather smugly* I just have a bizarre sense of the dramatic, actually. And thanks for the info about Jo. I was wondering... Oh, and that part was great! Feel very sorry for everyone, and they will all collapse with shock when they find out the truth, but it makes for great dramatics now! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by NickiL on Oct 29th, 2003, 12:33pm I've just thought of a real twist of fate ending, but I won't say in case I'm right and it spoils the story!! ;) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Nicolette on Oct 29th, 2003, 3:25pm Hmm, I've just thought of a twist too which seems to fit what Annie was saying. Won't say though, in case I make a complete arse out of myself. Annie, is it a cheesy twist? :D Talking of cheesy twists, I'm starving. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Chloe on Oct 29th, 2003, 4:04pm Please keep this up, i'm really enjoying it :) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Vikki on Oct 29th, 2003, 6:01pm Annie, are you writing more? Hope you are!! ;) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Esmeralda on Oct 30th, 2003, 12:00am Please carry on with this as soon as, Annie |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Sarah_L on Oct 30th, 2003, 3:17pm Please write more soon. The tension is building ... |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Marianne on Oct 30th, 2003, 5:04pm cripes! what a twist! those poor people @ the chalet! More please Annie, this is fantastic! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Kathryn on Oct 30th, 2003, 11:55pm If you are going to kill someone off, please let it be Robin. I just can't her at the moment for some reason. But not any of guys, please!? *joins the throng asking for more* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by NickiL on Oct 31st, 2003, 4:12pm Annie, where are you??! More please?!! ;D |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Elisabeth on Nov 2nd, 2003, 9:53am She's written a big chunk but she's too lazy to post it. I'll get her to hurry up and post it today. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 2nd, 2003, 9:56am Aha! I knew I wasn't the only one who'd done that! Please, Elisabeth, nag her like crazy! We're hanging out for more of this!!!!! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Elisabeth on Nov 2nd, 2003, 10:00am Am doing. ;) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 2nd, 2003, 10:12am Very glad to hear it! ;D |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Elisabeth on Nov 2nd, 2003, 10:25am Oh dear, my nagging hasn't been very successful. Apparently she's horrifically busy and sends her apologies. However, I don't think she'll be able to keep up working all day so if I see her doing nothing useful I'll make her come and post. Anyway, the good news is that her plot bunny hasn't died. She has got the next bit written and you'll get to read it eventually. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Lesley on Nov 2nd, 2003, 10:30am Better tell her to hurry or she'll have all these people waiting expiring from anticipation! Great story! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Annie on Nov 2nd, 2003, 3:36pm Deary me, I wouldn't want people expiring fro me! (Or would I? ;) he he heeee) on 11/02/03 at 09:53:57, Elisabeth wrote:
ELISABETH- YOU OUGHT TO KNOW THAT i AM UP TO MY NECK IN WORK!!! Only a tiny bit now and I shouldn't even do this! Have written a couple of pages, but haven't typed 'em up or posted them yet. Would love to post more if had time. Is very interested in people's ideas. Is sorry about delay. There were two so different figures emerging from the two houses the next morning. At the Chalet, a dejected figure was seen donning skis and carrying skates outside a completely snow-covered fence. At the other school, a tall man, overcome with excitement was seen clambering out of an upstairs window and slithering down the huge stacked-up pile of snow clutching wildly at air, and a pair of skates, wearing enough clothes to dress an elephant- it was utterly freezingThere were two so different figures emerging from the two houses the next morning. At the Chalet, a dejected figure was seen donning skis and carrying skates outside a completely snow-covered fence. At the other school, a tall man, overcome with excitement was seen clambering out of an upstairs window and slithering down the huge stacked-up pile of snow clutching wildly at air, and a pair of skates, wearing enough clothes to dress an elephant- it was utterly freezing - and an utterly thrilled expression on his face making enough noise to rouse the dead. Indeed, it did wake Joey from a peaceful sleep, who sat up in alarm. Demanding to know what was up and not ceasing until Matron had told her the whole story without missing anything- in answer to the demands of Miss Jo. The end of it saw a now worried Matron trying to calm down an uncontrollable and hysterical Joey. Eventually she was calmed and was permitted to go to the window and watch Jem race towards the lake, just as the rest of the school was doing. Just as he had put on his skates and set off, another figure broke from the scenery on the other side of the lake, and was skating swiftly towards Jem. It is no wonder that Jack stopped short at the indescribable sight of the figure of Dr. Russell with wildly flailing arms and his clear voice cutting sharp through the crisp air, shouting “Jack, Jack” continuously, hurtling dangerously towards him. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Vikki on Nov 2nd, 2003, 8:03pm *hopes Annie gets un-busy enough to post more soon!!* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Nicolette on Nov 2nd, 2003, 9:25pm I hope in his excitment, Jem doesn't send Jack crashing through the ice - it would bring it round full circle rather aptly though. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 2nd, 2003, 9:45pm *giggles at the mental image created by Nicolette's words* I'm so glad we've got more of this at last! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Susan on Nov 3rd, 2003, 2:05am Annie this is brilliant. I love it. PLease don't kill Jem or Jack. Can't wait for Madge's reaction - especially if she is too ill to go and see for herself. Will Madge ever trust Jem again? |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by LauraT on Nov 3rd, 2003, 6:54pm Or you could kill them both off....bahaha. Sorry, have been bloodthirstily inspired by just reading all of Lesleys halloween special. I love Jack really. ;D |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Annie on Nov 5th, 2003, 4:16pm Actually i'm getting even more and more work! :'( I won't be able to post more for a while, but I'll try hard! I'm good- you know that! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Rachael P on Nov 6th, 2003, 10:46am Looking forward to more ... but reluctantly admitting that maybe you ought to put school work first! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Jennie on Nov 7th, 2003, 8:43am I love this Annie, but you have to put your school work first. I never did reckon much to Jem's abilities as a doctor. ;D |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Annie on Nov 8th, 2003, 9:56am Finally had a bit of time to do a bit of typing- voila the next bit: As they met in the centre of the lake, they shook hands most warmly, although one looking rather stunned and the other thrilled. “Oh Jack” the taller of the two men was saying. “I shall never be able to forgive myself for what I have done. People say I’m such a good doctor, and I can’t even tell whether someone is dead or alive! I have learnt an important lesson in a very harsh way. Never be too hasty in your judgement, is the moral of this event. Never hesitate to check and check again before making a final statement.” “Jem!” Dr. Maynard was aghast. He had still hardly absorbed the full meaning of what Dr. Russell had said. “Oh Jem, is it really true.” These words were shouted so loudly, that the watchers at the Chalet School started in surprise. Jack looked up at the Saints’ school with such a bright, overjoyed look in his eyes, and the next minute saw the two men shooting their way towards that school, after a most childlike jig and mad waving on the part of Dr. Maynard- much to the surprise of the watchers at that school, who were now thoroughly puzzled. That young man had left them not ten minutes before in such a dejected state and was now in a state of ecstasy, with Jem still wildly excited. A “Calm down old boy. I don’t want to start dosing you as well old chap” from Jem, eventually sedated Dr. Maynard. Then, suddenly, when they were almost at the school, Jem stopped and grabbed at Dr. Maynard’s arm. “How are Madge and the Robin” he asked, almost in a whisper. Any looker-on near the two would have seen both doctors’ faces suddenly fall. This was enough for Jem, and he turned swiftly and raced back to the chalet, leaving Jack to go on again to the other school, once more in a state of utter excitement, where he was welcomed most warmly by a very emotional Miss. Browne and staff, and quickly shown up to Joey’s room. *** Meanwhile, Jem skated silently on towards the Chalet School, once more thinking about the terrible state in which he may find his wife and Robin, terrible thoughts racing through his mind as he inwardly cursed himself for his folly. Without taking off his skates, a feat much admired by the middles, he ran unsteadily towards the chalet, breaking through the crowds of people showing his delight once more, and confusing the staff and pupils even more, if that was possible. Without stopping, despite the desperate pleas from Mademoiselle and Bill, ran upstairs to the sick bay and immediately asked to see Madge. Even Matron melted before his fervent entreaties, and he was shown into her room. What happened in that private room was never known, but when he emerged, Dr. Jem looked a world better that he had done for the past three days, with the report that Madge was now sleeping peacefully. The Robin, however, was a rather different matter and it took some time and hard work to persuade that young lady that what Oncle Jem had said was the truth and that Zoë was much better and would be up and back at school in less that two weeks. *Hopes everyone's still enjoying it.* I hadn't abandoned it after all! i can't decide whether to have this twist at the end- and it's not what you're all thinking! (i.e. Joey actually dying) if that IS what you're thinking! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Rachel on Nov 8th, 2003, 10:02am Glad to see you had time to do some more Annie! And wondering what twist you DO have in store for us! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 8th, 2003, 10:23am Wonderful work, Annie. This is a great story, and a twist at the end would be great, particularly if, for once, none of our favourite characters were killed.... *hopeful* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Annie on Nov 8th, 2003, 11:06am Fear not! I probably won't do a twist anyway |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 8th, 2003, 11:07am *very relieved* But don't let yourself be talked out of a twist. Why that can lead into wonderful things - like sequels! ;) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Lesley on Nov 8th, 2003, 11:12am Really enjoying this Annie - very impressed at Jem walking on his skates - have visions of him getting stuck halfway up the stairs as the sharp blades sink into the wooden slats! More please! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Jennie on Nov 8th, 2003, 12:11pm Entranced by Lesley's vision of Dr Jem stuck to the stairs permanently. After all, how does he manage to bend down to unlace his skates without falling over backwards? New drabble anyone? |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Esmeralda on Nov 8th, 2003, 7:57pm Please do write a twist at the end Annie, great story! I wouldn't trust Jem's doctoring skills again though. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 8th, 2003, 9:14pm on 11/08/03 at 12:11:45, Jennie wrote:
And then maybe can write a nice bloodthirsty little story about what happes to him after he dies... |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Vikki on Nov 8th, 2003, 9:52pm Thank you for your long post Annie! Please post more when you can! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Annie on Nov 9th, 2003, 4:36pm Well! People are making my nice little drabble rather corrupt aren't they! Hee, hee- at Jem getting stuck on the stairs. Talking about twists, I may, or I may not, but I just think that the nice, simple ending I have would be a bit better than all this bloodthirsty stuff you lot have in your minds! I don't have time to post any more now, but I've done loads of H/W (homework) today, so I should have more time this week. Anyway- Bysie bye |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by LauraT on Nov 9th, 2003, 5:12pm But if you give us the nice, gentle placid ending then we don't get any more drabble!!! :o :o :o * well, comparatively! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Vikki on Nov 9th, 2003, 7:40pm on 11/09/03 at 16:36:25, Annie wrote:
Annie, it's your story, so you end it however you want! Don't let this bloodthirsty mob influence you!! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Annie on Nov 13th, 2003, 6:24pm Quite bloodthirsty! I am loath to end it, but I don't want to spoil it, and as Vikki says, I can end it however I want. By the way, if Jem did get stuck on the stairs, did it ever occur to you idiots that maybe he could take off his skates??? Or do NONE of you have ANY sense whatsoever, as I thought. Also by the way, I've been away for such an age, and now everyone is becoming disinterested, so I'm very unhappy, but it is my own fault. I should get a chance this W/E to post some more so don't abandon me, please, even if I have ruined my story. :'( I would post some now, except 1- I am FAR too busy (although I suppose I could have written some in the time I've written this, although the story is upstairs and I'm downstairs) and 2- I wish I had typed some up some other time and not posted it, so I could at least give you a sentence or two. Hope to be back soon. BYEEEEEE |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Vikki on Nov 13th, 2003, 10:15pm We'll be looking forward to more, when you get time to post it Annie! :) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 13th, 2003, 11:04pm *highly offended by Annie's unfounded critcisms* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Lisa_T on Nov 14th, 2003, 1:57am What criticism are you talking about, KB? The one where she tells us we've no sense whatsoever, or the one where she calls us idiots? I think that deserves a Head's Report! ;) Oh, Annie. Think about it. Half way up wooden stairs. Nice sharp skate edges sink in at an awkward angle. Skating boots can be difficult things to get off at the best of times. I think it's quite probable Jem would end up flat on his back! :P ;D |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:00am Personally, by both. *waits for Annie to return so that she can be dragged off to the Head's study and looking forward to hearing what Miss Annersley has to say* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Lisa_T on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:03am *offers to help KB with the dragging. Maybe we should make the punishment fit the crime and put skating boots on her and tell her to use the longest, most complicated route to the study and go with her and make sure she does!* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:05am *admiring Lisa's blatant cruelty and goes off to hunt for skates* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Vikki on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:06am *points out to Lisa that this might count as bullying a junior.....* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:08am No, it isn't! It's a new and original punishment which fits the crime! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Lisa_T on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:12am *reminds Vikki that the junior had been guilty of gross impertinence at the very least and deserves all she gets!* ;D |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Vikki on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:13am *is unsure whether the Heads will agree?* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Lisa_T on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:15am They'll agree. We're Head's Reps, aren't we? Nobody aint allowed to be rude to us! ;) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:15am *knows they will and has already checked with them to make sure* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Vikki on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:19am Oh! Well in that case.... *joins wholeheartedly in plotting Annie's punishment!* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:21am I didn't think you'd be able to resist! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Lisa_T on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:22am *g* Any refinements you;d like to make, Vikki? *has great faith in the fertility of Vikki's imagination* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:24am *waits eagerly for Vikki's imagination to begin working* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Vikki on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:33am We-ell, we could make her balance the entire CS series on her head, while she walks to the study on her skates....... |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Lisa_T on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:36am and every time she drops one, she has to go back to the beginning and start all over again! Mwhahahaha! Oh, just to check- the entire series in HB or PB? |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:37am Why not both? The GGB editions, too. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Vikki on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:39am And all the extras too! ;D |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by crashbb on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:40am We should throw in the fill-ins for good measure! Or is that going too far? |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Vikki on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:42am Lets add in all the potential fill ins too!! And all EBD's other titles!!! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Lisa_T on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:45am *giggling* Why not make her carry an entire library on her head and be done with it? But think what wonders it will do for her deportment! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by crashbb on Nov 14th, 2003, 2:47am I think she'd best get back here and post more of the story before she ends up with the entire National Library on her head!!! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 14th, 2003, 3:11am *giggle* Who cares about her deportment? This is appropriate punishment, darn it! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by PatW on Nov 14th, 2003, 10:31am I think you two are getting your threads muddled1 ::) This isn't the one where we are punishing EBD_Herself! :o |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 14th, 2003, 10:35am No, Pat, we're not punishing EBD here. We're talking about Annie, who said this about us: Quote:
Having taken offence, we're conjuring up a nice lot of appropriate punishments for the impudent little so-and-so. |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Lisa_T on Nov 14th, 2003, 10:36am *wondering where Pat got the idea we were after EBD_Herself on this thread.* ;D ;D |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 14th, 2003, 10:41am *can't believe Lisa is back online already* |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Lisa_T on Nov 14th, 2003, 10:54am You're so welcoming, KB! ;D I did go offline at three. Didn't sleep- contemplated coming back on at around five as the finished Tara popped into my head. Now of course I've forgotten most of it! In the meantime I should hit the shower as I'm meeting a friend for lunch- thus the 'early' rising! ;) |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 14th, 2003, 10:57am Sorry, I was so surprised to see you (knowing how late (early) you'd gone to bed) that I forgot my manners! :-[ |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by Lisa_T on Nov 14th, 2003, 11:01am *g* No worries- I was only winding you up! |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by KB on Nov 14th, 2003, 11:05am *takes Lisa aside and unwinds in a very infantile manner* :P :P :P |
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Title: Re: Alternative Rivals Post by xanthe on Nov 14th, 2003, 4:09pm *giggling at the yibbling* Annie, please come back and write some more as soon as schoolwork allows :) |
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