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#1: They're Close Tonight Author: Kathye, Location: Laleham

Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2004 11:22 pm

Okay please be kind, as I have never posted anything before, not sure were I got the guts from to post this. Its complete and well yes....hope it makes sense....

They’re close tonight, the bombs.
Falling, exploding, all around me.
I sit huddled on my doorstep, waiting, watching.
I take another draw from the cigarette and jump as one hits nearby the building shakes.
I can see smoke and fires coming from all over the city.
I should be in a shelter, but I can’t seem to make myself care what happens.
I need to be free.
Another gruelling day in the factory, slowly worked to death, anything must be better than living this that is my motivation, not doing anything, helping them.
Everyone I loved is gone, dead or one of them.
I try and calm down, getting upset won’t help me now.
The drone of planes overhead makes me look up, the rat-a-tat of the anti-aircraft guns goes mad, and I listen to the shrill whiney noise of the bombs falling, waiting for them to explode.
The night sky is lit up with flashes of light from all directions and I wonder again if tonight will be my last.
I light another cigarette, time seems to slow down waiting like this, too much time to think.
I huddle closer to the doorway as a fine mist of rain starts to fall.

Will the noise ever stop? They’re close now, maybe 2 streets away.
If only I could run far, far away and never stop.
I check my watch again, almost time to leave.
The explosives are hidden in my skirt if I’m stopped they hopefully won’t find them.
Would they ever understand, those long ago friends, so far away now?
I think of them now, those happy days.
So carefree.
They keep me hopeful for a better future, the ideals in our Peace League.
It's time to leave, I send up a quick prayer to a God I’m no-longer sure exists and head into the empty streets and towards the unknown.

#2: Author: Josie, Location: London

Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2004 11:25 pm

Kathye - you already know what I think but I'll say it again.This is a very emotive piece of writing, with a very chilling twist at the end. It sent shivers down my spine.Thank you And now you've posted one, you can post osme more.... Wink

#3: Author: Liss, Location: Harrow, London

Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2004 11:29 pm

Kathye, that was amazing! It really captured the girl's desperation with her world (if that makes sense).

#4: Author: Mora, Location: Lancaster

Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2004 11:54 pm

Ohhhhh. That's very powerful. *shivers*

#5: Author: Vikki, Location: Sitting on an iceberg, freezing to death!!!

Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2004 11:56 pm

Wow!!!!Kathye King! Don't you EVER let me hear you say you can't write! That was amazing!

#6: Author: patmac, Location: Yorkshire England

Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2004 12:35 am

Shivers down the spine! Thank you Kathye

#7: Author: Dawn, Location: Leeds, West Yorks

Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2004 1:05 am

Kathye - that's made me cry (again - seem to have been doing a lot of that today on here)

#8: Author: Lesley, Location: Allhallows, Kent

Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2004 8:21 am

Kathye that was so powerful, you could feel what the girl felt. Hope she succeeded in her mission. Looking forward to seeing more writings from you - you have no excuse now. Laughing

#9: Author: pim, Location: Helmel Hampster

Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2004 9:19 am

Kathey that was amazing, I can't stop shaking now it was so strong.

#10: Author: Cazx, Location: Swansea/Bristol

Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2004 9:56 am

Kathye, that was brilliant, so emotive and powerful. Crying or Very sad

#11: Author: Richenda,

Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2004 1:15 pm

As soon as I read it I thought of Giovanna. I always liked her in Exile (the 2nd CS I read) and wish we'd heard more of her. Wonderful.

#12: Author: Carolyn P, Location: Lancaster, England

Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2004 1:22 pm

Kathye that was very emotive, what ever stopped you writing before?

#13: Author: Marianne, Location: Lancaster

Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2004 2:58 pm

gosh, impressive stuff. Very moving and powerful...thank you.

#14: Author: LizB, Location: Oxon, England

Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2004 3:33 pm

wow! Thanks Kathye Liz

#15: Author: Kathye, Location: Laleham

Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2004 3:59 pm

Richenda wrote:

As soon as I read it I thought of Giovanna. I always liked her in Exile (the 2nd CS I read) and wish we'd heard more of her. Wonderful.

That is who it is meant to be, I have been playing around with ideas about her story for ages and this bit in the middle just sort of came together, not sure the rest will ever get written though Thank you everyone, you are all very kind Embarassed

I find it really hard to write and normally it never sounds how I want it to, but this was better than most and Josie talked me into posting it.

#16: Author: Nicci, Location: UK

Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2004 4:02 pm

Wow. Kathye. That was incrediable. It really sent shivers down my spine and gave me goose-bumps.

#17: Author: Ally, Location: Jack Maynard's Dressing Room!!

Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2004 4:21 pm

Kathye that was wonderful and extremely goosebumpy. I look forward to seeing more drabbles from you!

#18: Author: Richenda,

Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2004 4:49 pm

kathye wrote:

I have been playing around with ideas about her story for ages and this bit in the middle just sort of came together, not sure the rest will ever get written though

Please do! Please do!! I'd love to hear more of Giovanna (Would tie in beautifully with 'Refugee' - wasn't Giovanna Sigrid's cousin?)**Bounces up and down in a most undignified way**

#19: Author: Helen P, Location: Crewe, Cheshire

Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2004 9:31 pm

Kathye that is excellent. Please have a go at writing the rest - it would be lovely to see it.

#20: Author: Gem, Location: Saltash/Aberystwyth

Posted: Sat Nov 13, 2004 12:46 am

Kathye, that was brilliant! Please write more Very Happy

*begging shamelessly*

#21: Author: Susan, Location: Carlisle

Posted: Sun Nov 14, 2004 7:24 pm

Kathye, that was absolutley brilliant. REally captures the essence of the times. Looking forward to more!

#22: Author: Kim, Location: Tipperary, Ireland

Posted: Sun Nov 14, 2004 9:23 pm

Kathye this grabs your interest by the throat and holds it there - well done and keep writing

#23: Author: Kathy_S, Location: midwestern US

Posted: Mon Nov 15, 2004 1:32 am

Kathye wrote:

not sure the rest will ever get written though

*hopes the rest gets written* Thank you, Kathye.

#24: Author: Rachael,

Posted: Tue Nov 16, 2004 10:51 am

Wow ... So evocative and I love the style of it Totally agree that Kathye has been hiding her light under a bushel and if you've been thinking about Giovanna's story for some time, then we can look forward to plenty more of this ... Very Happy

As Richenda says, it works so well in conjunction with Refugee and I would also love to know more of this story, particularly as she is striving to keep to the Peace league ideals whilst being forced to work in a German factory

#25: Author: Nell, Location: London, England

Posted: Tue Nov 16, 2004 1:46 pm

Gem told me this was amazing and I totally agree!! Kathye, this is so powerful and really bring home the stresses Giovanni felt tryign to reconcile the peace league and her CS days with the world she found herself in. Thank you...and I'd love to see more...

#26: Author: Abi, Location: Alton, Hants

Posted: Tue Nov 16, 2004 3:27 pm

Kathye this is amazing, and so emotive. You should defintitely write some more.

#27: Author: Elzbie, Location: London

Posted: Tue Nov 16, 2004 4:06 pm

I quite agree. That was fantastic and it would be fab to have some more. *joins in with the shameless begging...*

#28: Author: Rachel, Location: West Coast of Scotland

Posted: Sat Jan 29, 2005 9:48 pm

Oh Kathye! About time you added to this! I know I have only just found it, but it is brilliant! Please please add more to the story!

#29: Author: Kathye, Location: Laleham

Posted: Sat Jan 29, 2005 11:25 pm

I run as fast as I can through the dark alleys of the city, another successful mission.
The cattle trucks won’t be loading their passengers tomorrow now.
But it won’t stop them,
I can’t stop them,
Not for long.

Anger wells up within.
The images of crying children and frightened adults flash through my mind.
The things I have seen just won’t go away.
Neighbours informing on neighbours,
Families turning on each other,
All in their eagerness to please the Fuhrer, such hatred and evil permeate the very air I breathe.

#30: Author: Kat, Location: Swansea

Posted: Sat Jan 29, 2005 11:26 pm

Thank you Kathye. So very real, and very teary Sad

#31: Author: Lesley, Location: Allhallows, Kent

Posted: Sat Jan 29, 2005 11:32 pm

At least she is doing something, so many didn't. Thank yopu Kathye, pleased you added to this.

#32: Author: Chloë, Location: London/Southampton: when away from home planet!

Posted: Sat Jan 29, 2005 11:44 pm

Glad you were talked into posting Kathye this really is great stuff!

#33: Author: Kathye, Location: Laleham

Posted: Sat Jan 29, 2005 11:58 pm

Was that a shadow,
is someone behind me ?
My senses go into overdrive as I strain to hear any noise.
My stomach clenches painfully with fear.
I can trust no one,
My sister tried to talk to me today, but she is engaged to one of the SS, a soldier, a killer, the enemy.
I reach home and search for signs that someone is waiting.
I crouch in the bushes and wait, listening, was someone behind me?
I’m sure you can hear the beating of my heart, it sounds so loud!

#34: Author: Ally, Location: Jack Maynard's Dressing Room!!

Posted: Sat Jan 29, 2005 11:59 pm

That was beautiful and poignant Kathye. Thank you for writing more.

#35: Author: Gem, Location: Saltash/Aberystwyth

Posted: Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:05 am

Thank you Kathye Kiss

Very powerful. Crying or Very sad

#36: Author: Kathy_S, Location: midwestern US

Posted: Sun Jan 30, 2005 1:38 am

Very atmospheric, Kathye! Thanks for coming back to this.

#37: Author: Vikki, Location: Sitting on an iceberg, freezing to death!!!

Posted: Sun Jan 30, 2005 1:38 am

Thank you Kathye! very moving, and even more poignant with the recent Holocaust memorial services fresh in the memory.

#38: Author: Dawn, Location: Leeds, West Yorks

Posted: Sun Jan 30, 2005 10:45 am

Kathye this is so powerful and incredibly emotive (think that's the word I mean Confused

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#39: Author: LizB, Location: Oxon, England

Posted: Sun Jan 30, 2005 2:10 pm

This is amazing Kathye. Thanks for continuing it. Liz

#40: Author: pim, Location: Helmel Hampster

Posted: Sun Jan 30, 2005 7:40 pm

Wow. Thanks Kathye.

#41: Author: Carolyn P, Location: Lancaster, England

Posted: Sun Jan 30, 2005 9:30 pm

This is gut wrenching Kathye. Raw emotion. Thanks...I think! Somehow thanks for somehting that churns like that doesn't sound right.

#42: Author: Cazx, Location: Swansea/Bristol

Posted: Sun Jan 30, 2005 10:02 pm

This is amazing Kathye! Am in awe!

#43: Author: francesn, Location: away with the faeries

Posted: Mon Jan 31, 2005 12:21 am

please do write some more Kathye, this is really incredibly and very moving.

#44: Author: Nell, Location: London, England

Posted: Mon Jan 31, 2005 10:55 am

Thank you Kathye.

#45: Author: Rachel, Location: West Coast of Scotland

Posted: Mon Jan 31, 2005 10:59 am

Really glad you decided to continue with this Kathye - keep it going!

#46: Author: Rachael,

Posted: Mon Jan 31, 2005 2:05 pm

Good to see this back, Kathye - very powerful

#47: Author: Helen P, Location: Crewe, Cheshire

Posted: Mon Jan 31, 2005 10:36 pm

This is really evocative, Kathye. Wow.

#48: Author: Susan, Location: Carlisle

Posted: Tue Feb 01, 2005 2:10 pm

Very powerful Kathye. Please continue it when you are able.

#49: Author: Josie, Location: London

Posted: Tue Feb 01, 2005 2:13 pm

SOOO glad to see you've carried on with this Kathye. The follow ups are as excellent as the first bit.

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